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persian cat
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The grey and one-eyed  
persian cat  
hissed at me  
and at my hat  
It had tried to kill a sable once  
which cost an eye  
and lifelong rest  
A sable's an expensive beast  
The one that made my winter cap  
incensed the cat  
which smouldered yet  
as I passed by  
into the snowbound  
churchyard  
Stones were placed there  
in long and ragged rows  
Not like the ones in circles  
that seem like spirits  
of the earth  
speaking of ancient Scottish shores  
and Cambrian hills  
The rows were mirthless  
moss-grown signs of those  
who never quite lived free  
speaking of nothing  
ever  

nothing said to me  
whom once the buried  
tried to kill  

and whom they could not now  
deny  




Lancelot Price  2011 July 03
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~13liss Mar 27, 2013  New member Hobbyist Writer
Found this poem sad and yet the imagery was extremely beautiful and nice. One thing i would say is you might want to consider classifying it as spoken word, sounded really nice when i read it aloud.
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:iconlancelotprice:
Everything I write is written to be read aloud, or at least heard in the mind as though it were in a voice. There should be a pause at every line break, and if I use them, commas. And I think classification should be abandoned as the most useless thing for writing ever. :D

Thanks for good thoughts. :)
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~13liss Mar 27, 2013  New member Hobbyist Writer
Totally agree! My writing used to be extremely technical but i'm trying to abandon that for a more free flowing style. I think all the best writers are the ones who saw how others write, and completely ignored it! haha Good work anyways mate
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:iconlancelotprice:
Thank you, sir. How do you pronounce> 13liss?
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:icon13liss:
~13liss Mar 27, 2013  New member Hobbyist Writer
No prob. Strange question haha, 13=B so its Bliss as in a heavenly feeling. Ba-liss :)
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:iconlancelotprice:
It's not strange if one doesn't know what it means. :D Thanks. :)
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:icon13liss:
~13liss Mar 28, 2013  New member Hobbyist Writer
Haha true, well now you do :D
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*katarthis Jun 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Spoke to me today, this did.

k
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:iconlancelotprice:
Glad it did something for you, k. Thanks for commenting and for faving. :)
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:iconszografos:
Weeping, no unseemly display
in view of sights like these.
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